برعي محمد: قراءة في قصة ( مواجهة ) الفائزة بالمركز الثاني لمسابقة نيرفانا؛ لمجاهد الدومة.

           

 تنوعت طريقة السرد في القصة ( مواجهة )

ما بين روائية و شعرية نلاحظ دا على مستوى اللغة و ليس على مستوى المحكي فقط ، فاللغة الشعرية تناوبت و تمازجت مع اللغة التسجيلية لتشكيل لغة السرد و تسلل منها وهج شعري إلى بنية السرد فكسر رتابته و بطأ ديناميته و فجر بالتالي إهاب الشكل القصصي و أنتقلت بذلك التحولات السردية من مجرد الحركية إلى حركية وجدانية تسافر بالحواس داخل الأشياء و تخلق نبض خيالي لها و فضاء تصوري و مشاعري يكتنف المتلقي ، نلاحظ ذلك التمازج الفريد جليا على طول القصة حين يقول مجاهد ….

” أتذكر ذلك و أنا على حافة خلع مئزر الفستان من عنقي، تتملكني أصوات و نداءات داخلية، عطش يندهني، يحثني على الاستجابة، للشرب من نداء حاجة لطالما طاردتني  و تجاهلتها، لكنها ما أن ينغلق لها منفذاً حتى تتسرب من آخر و في لحظة تمرير أناملي لفك مئزر الفستان، أمر بالندبة  في نهاية عنقي يرتعش جسدي كله وأنا أمر بها، المرور الذي يعيدني من الندبة إلى تاريخ الجرح في ذلك اليوم ” …

مجاهد في القصة ينطلق من لغة تسجيلية يرافقها وصف محترف و تقنية بانورامية تطوف في المكان و تسجل كل مفرداته و كأنها عدسة تصوير سينمائي يحسب المسافات بدقة و يرسم المشهد و كأنه واقع و مع ذلك لم يعجز أن يضفر معها لغة شعرية رقيقة عذبة مع الحفاظ على تدفق السرد و سلاسة مساره يستخدم  فيها تقنيات التشبيه و الإستعارة والكناية و مسحة خيال ساحر كضباب الصباح الذي كنا نذهب فيه إلى المدرسة و على ذلك يستنفر الكاتب مع كل تقنياته ذاكرة المتلقي التي لن تخلو من تلك المشاهد المحفورة فيها فيخلق حالة إبداعية متكاملة ترفع نفس المتلقي و روحه في سماوات مفتوحة من الذكرى والحلم والحنين و نشوة البدايات ..

استطاع مجاهد أيضا توظيف تقنية الجمل القصيرة في شعرية السرد ، فأعطت حيوية للسرد و مسار متدفق و جرس موسيقي نلاحظه في القصة و يتضح أكثر حين نسمعها ممن يقرأها بتمعن  “

أنا مرآتكِ…جيشان يخوضان المعركة في دمي، في مدارات لا متناهية يدور عقلي، تتفتق بذور الشوق المنادي داخلي، والسماوات تعلو أكثر. يداي ترتعشان؛ تعزفان لحن الإرتباك، المناوشات تبدأ، المعركة تحتدم، أتقدم حثيثاً، حثيثاً ،في لحظة أستشعر قرب النصر، أخطو للأمام، بينما ذاكرة كاملة تجرني إلى الخلف؛ فالمعركةُ تتسم بالجدة، بالنتائج المبهمة وغير المعروفُ مصيرها و وسط كل ذلك ينثال صوت عذب، نافضاً الغبار عن ذاتي، آخذاً يدي برفق في طريق ممتد هامساً……….” قصر الجمل و وضوحها و سرعة مسارها و حضور السؤال يعبر عن حالة السارد الشعورية المسيطرة عليه من اللهفة و الجمل هنا مكثفة الصور و الإستعارات والتشبيهات والجماليات لترتفع بالحس الشعري للمتلقي .

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